A Romance in Two Cheeks

Empty corporate office, nothing on the shelves, monitor and keyboard sitting on bare desk.

FADE IN:

INT. BUSINESS OFFICE – EVENING

COLIN, 38, is tall and lean, dressed fashionably, with black hair in a stylish cut. He has a small leather backpack slung over one shoulder. He exits his office, locks his door, glances up and down the hallway. The hall is dark in one direction, lit up in the other. All other office doors are closed but one. COLIN walks toward the lights, to the only open office door. He leans inside, smiling.

COLIN

Looks like you’re the last one here, Elena!

ELENA, 49, has dark bobbed hair and a sprightly expression, and she is curvy and voluptuous with age. She is working on her computer, her desk facing the doorway. Her office is dark but for the glow of her screen and a desk lamp.

ELENA

I’m the last one? Everyone else is gone?

COLIN enters ELENA’s office, slowly approaching her desk as he speaks.

COLIN

Sure, Maureen’s out sick, Trevor took vacation until Monday, Krystal and Stewart are in the downtown office for conferences. Luke’s kid fell sick and had to be pulled from school. Gail’s waiting for the repairman for her garage door so she can get her car out. Everyone else took off, I was just staying late to wrap up some website stuff, last-minute.

ELENA

Thank you for doing that. Have you been staying late a lot this week for that?

COLIN

Not too bad. It just needs to get done, you know? I’ll get the lights and lock the front door for you. See you−

COLIN smiles, waves, and starts to leave. ELENA takes her hands off her keyboard and leans for a better view of the doorway.

ELENA

Colin, wait!

COLIN returns, surprised.

COLIN

Sure, what’s up?

ELENA

Are you in a hurry right now? I mean…

COLIN

My bus is coming up soon but there’s another one in 20 minutes. I’ve got nothing going on tonight. What’s up?

ELENA

Well, I’m almost done with what I’m working on, then I’ve got to save it to the server, so if you can wait…

COLIN says nothing, looking at ELENA in confusion.

ELENA

It’s just that it’s dark out, and I parked in the far lot.

COLIN

Oh! Would you like me to walk you to your car?

ELENA

Would you mind?

COLIN

I’d be happy to! I’ll just hang out, that’s fine.

COLIN seats himself in leather chair before ELENA’s desk, resting his bag and crossing one leg over his knee, checking his smartphone for updates. ELENA smiles and types for a few moments before pausing thoughtfully.

ELENA

Actually, I wanted to talk to you about your job, too. I mean, the job you’ve been doing. [laughs] That sounds bad! It’s not.

COLIN

Okay.

ELENA

Well, some people have noticed you looking at me a certain way.

COLIN sits up straight in his chair, uncrossing his legs, pocketing his phone.

COLIN

What way is this?

ELENA begins to speak, folds her hands and presses them to her lips, then looks up at COLIN and continues, gently.

ELENA

An inappropriate way.

COLIN

This isn’t true. Who said this?

ELENA

Well, actually… I noticed. Don’t bother denying it, I’ve caught you staring at me in our department meetings.

ELENA pushes her chair slowly from her desk and rises, walking around her desk to lean against it, in front of COLIN. ELENA is calm and casual; COLIN is wary and tense.

ELENA

Staring between my thighs, trying to peek up my skirt… when I wear one.

COLIN

If it looked that way, I apologize, but I never−

ELENA

It’s okay, Colin. That kind of attention… it feels good. I haven’t had it in a long time. A very long time. I admit that I miss it.

COLIN relaxes only slightly. He’s not going to lose his job, but he doesn’t want this conversation to get out of control. ELENA pulls a tube of cream from a drawer and rubs it on her hands.

COLIN

I’m sorry to hear that. My girlfriend tells me how women start to feel invisible after… when society decides… um…

ELENA

You don’t have to mention your girlfriend, just like I won’t bring up my husband. Let’s leave them out of this for now, okay?

COLIN

What are you saying?

ELENA walks around COLIN as she speaks, closing the office door.

ELENA

We don’t have to talk about this at all, what we’re going to do. I just want you to do something for me.

ELENA slaps COLIN with her open palms, once on each side of his face in rapid succession. COLIN appears stunned, then slowly passes out.

DISSOLVE:

COLIN is lying on his back on the floor of ELENA’s office. He is groggy and struggling to perceive his environment. His clothes are opened, loosened, and mostly removed. ELENA is massaging cream into his skin. Her hands are very large and easily cover his entire chest and stomach. COLIN passes out again.

DISSOLVE:

COLIN wakes up on the seat of an enormous leather chair. He is nude and his clothes are nowhere to be found. Music is still playing on ELENA’s computer, where he can’t see it. ELENA stands nearby, undressing herself. She is of tremendous size now, so all COLIN can see are her broad, round hips and her tremendous bottom, which sways near the chair.

ELENA (O.S.)

Oh, you’re awake!

COLIN

What the hell is going on?

ELENA begins to dance for COLIN, to the slow music on the computer. Her vast, bare bottom swings massively to and fro. COLIN scrambles away from her bottom, but flinches from falling off the other side of the chair. ELENA’s laughter rings from off stage, very loud.

ELENA (O.S.)

Go ahead and look now, Colin. I hope you like what you see.

COLIN

Elena, what did you do to me? What’s going on?

ELENA

Are you interested in this? Is this what you were thinking about, when you were staring at me?

ELENA’s huge hands descend from above. Her long fingers dig deeply into her fleshy bottom and spread her buttocks. COLIN stares in amazement, maybe horror. Before he can do more, ELENA’s bottom backs up to the chair and her bottom slowly lowers upon COLIN. He is overwhelmed by their size, but he has nowhere to flee to, and so he screams.

Despite her size, ELENA is gentle with COLIN and very carefully rests her bottom upon his entire body, touching down then rising again, trapping him between her buttocks and releasing him again, over and over. ELENA’s laughter can be heard off-stage. COLIN cries out, punching and kicking at her enormous bottom, to no avail.

COLIN

Elena, this is insane! Did you drug me? Am I hallucinating?

ELENA (O.S.)

Oh no, my little man. This is all very real. Do you like it? I’ve been waiting to share this with someone special! The first time I caught you looking at me, I didn’t believe it, of course. Who would want an old woman like me? But when you kept glancing at me, when you thought I wasn’t looking, I started to wonder.

ELENA’s bottom lowers upon COLIN but she doesn’t rise this time. COLIN’s head and shoulders can be seen between her buttocks. His face grows red with the tension placed upon him and he gasps for breath.

ELENA (O.S.)

Then I started to dress for you. Does that sound silly? I selected shorter skirts, and I dug out my old knee-high boots. For you! I guess I got carried away, but it just felt nice for someone to be interested in me. Not my husband… sorry… but a handsome young man in the office. Did your girlfriend ever explain to you about “positive male attention” and how important that can be?

COLIN is unable to answer but shakes his head violently. ELENA’s huge fingers return, massaging her buttocks. COLIN stares at them in alarm as her painted fingernails creep closer and closer to his head.

Suddenly ELENA’s bottom rises from COLIN, who strains to catch his breath.

COLIN

You… nearly killed me…

ELENA (O.S.)

Are you saying something? Look, there’s something else I want to try.

ELENA’s huge fingers descend from above and pluck COLIN off the seat easily. He rushes through space, her hand lowering him along the considerable length of her tremendous legs, then resting him on the floor. ELENA’s leg and foot are bare, and her large toes flex happily behind his nude body.

ELENA (O.S.)

See if you can climb up my leg, little man! Can you do that?

COLIN

You’re insane…

ELENA’s huge foot lifts off the ground slightly. She nudges COLIN with her toes, bowling him over.

ELENA (O.S.)

Come on, Colin, it’ll be fun! Do this for me. Let’s say if you can reach my face, no time limit, then I’ll grow you back up to your normal size, okay? Doesn’t that sound like fun?

ELENA’s tremendous feet bounce excitedly behind COLIN. The ground thunders with the impact and COLIN’s knees nearly give out in fright. Nonetheless, he begins to climb the bridge of her foot and wrap his arms around ELENA’s ankle, attempting to shimmy up her shin.

ELENA (O.S.)

You’re doing it! Oh, this is exciting! Now, I can’t make this too easy for you…

ELENA begins to walk around her office. We see COLIN clinging for his life to her lower leg, and just above him ELENA’s calf pumps with incredible power. Office furniture races past, the legs of her desk and chairs flying by almost too quickly to be perceived. With each of ELENA’s steps, thunder booms at great volume, but COLIN is unable to protect his ears. He strains to wrap his arms around her leg, and her foot lowers from view as her knee appears from above.

ELENA (O.S.)

This is taking far too long, Colin. I have another idea.

ELENA’s huge knee bends, lowering COLIN once again to the office floor. COLIN cries out in anguish, but ELENA’s huge fingers descend once more and pick up COLIN without effort. ELENA’s massive thigh  breezes past, and we see her tremendous bottom rotate into view once more. ELENA’s fingers deposit COLIN between her buttocks, just below her pelvis.

ELENA (O.S.)

I’m sorry, I really want to try this. I want to see what this feels like. Colin, carefully slide down between my… you know… and… oh gosh, this is embarrassing!

COLIN struggles to climb up to ELENA’s back but her fingers keep brushing him back down between her buttocks whenever he makes any progress. COLIN fends off her fingers but each one is too powerful for him.

COLIN

Elena, this is insane. What are you doing with me? You have a husband!

ELENA (O.S.)

Colin, please, we weren’t going to talk about that, remember? Look, just… please slide down to where you’re comfortable, and… I want you to have sex with… with my… Your thing will be very tiny now, to me, and it won’t hurt. Can you please just put it inside where…

COLIN

Are you telling me to have anal sex with you? Just spit it out.

ELENA (O.S.)

Well, yes, Colin. It’s very difficult for me to say, but I want you to try that with me. I really want to see what that feels like, at your size!

COLIN

And then you’ll let me go?

ELENA (O.S.)

That wasn’t the deal. You were supposed to climb up to my face, but you were taking forever about it, so now I want to try this.

COLIN

And what if I don’t?

ELENA (O.S.)

Well, I guess I could sit on you and force you to do it, after a fashion. Would you rather do it that way? Would you like me to grind my big butt into you until you just pop inside me? I think that sounds like fun, but maybe you’d like to come out of this in one piece, I don’t know.

COLIN is visibly frustrated but slowly crawls down between ELENA’s buttocks, until only his pale back is apparent. He struggles to find a comfortable position to stretch his arms and hold on, finally wedging himself between ELENA’s huge buttocks securely. His little body begins to jerk and rock rhythmically.

ELENA (O.S.)

Are you getting ready to do it?

COLIN

I’m inside you! For Christ’s sake. Can’t you feel anything?

ELENA (O.S.)

It’s a little ticklish. Is that you? Should I clench or something?

ELENA’s buttocks visibly shudder and engulf COLIN, who cries out in surprise.

ELENA (O.S.)

Oh my God, Colin! Are you okay? Did I hurt you?

COLIN

You started to crush me, Elena! [quietly] And, fuck me, I liked it…

ELENA’s buttocks begin to sway left and right. COLIN sways along with them, trapped and helpless. His little body continues to shudder with his efforts.

ELENA (O.S.)

Are you using your hands? I’m feeling something…

COLIN

[grunting with effort] Good, I’m glad that worked, at least. Do you like it?

ELENA (O.S.)

Yes, that’s… that’s very nice, Colin. What are you doing? Keep it up.

COLIN

I’ll tell you later… I just wanted to… oh, my God…

ELENA (O.S.)

Oh, my… that feels wonderful! What are you doing?

ELENA’s buttocks begin to rock forward and backward. When she thrusts backward, her buttocks spread and COLIN begins to slip. After a few times of this, COLIN is losing his position and scrabbles desperately to keep himself in place. His feet rub against ELENA’s vagina.

ELENA (O.S.)

There, that’s good, yes, more like that…

COLIN

Elena! I’m slipping! Help me climb back up your ass! [aside] That’s one of the strangest things I’ve ever said to a lover.

ELENA (O.S.)

Keep going like that, Colin! Please, more like that! I’m starting to… you’re really getting me… oh, this is awkward.

COLIN begins to slide down ELENA’s bottom. He digs with both hands in her anus and hangs there for a moment, his body squirming and bumping against her huge labia. We see moisture beginning to flow from between her labia, and COLIN quickly becomes coated in this.

COLIN

Can you even hear me? Elena, I need your help!

ELENA (O.S.)

This is fantastic… oh yes, just like that… you lovely little man… Are you saying something?

COLIN

Elena! Please! I can hardly hold on, you’re so wet!

ELENA (O.S.)

Well, try not to fall inside me! You might get lost and never come back out! [laughs]

COLIN

This isn’t funny, Elena! I need your help!

ELENA (O.S.)

[irritated] Okay, fine, Colin. Back to the game with you, I guess. But you owe me.

COLIN

Back to the what?

ELENA’s fingers reach around one massive buttock and seize COLIN a little roughly by his wrists. He cries out but is unable to adjust himself. He is hauled up a great distance; ELENA’s side flies by like a building, and then one of her breasts swings into view. It’s very large and round with an erect nipple poking out. ELENA places COLIN at the top of her breast. He reaches and gropes but there is nothing to hold onto on her flat, smooth skin, and his body slowly begins to slide down her breast.

COLIN

Elena! Help!

ELENA (O.S.)

I can’t do everything for you, little man. You’re going to have to show a little resourcefulness or initiative, or something. Did I tell you what I’m going to do to you if you fail to complete your task?

COLIN gains speed as he slides, leaving a streak of ELENA’s lubrication overhead on her breast, but at the last second he seizes her nipple. He hangs from her erect nipple like a piece of jewelry, panting and looking around, then slowly climbs up and seats himself upon it, clamping it between his thighs. ELENA moans, and COLIN rises and falls with her heavy breathing.

COLIN

There’s a punishment for this?

ELENA (O.S.)

Yes, if you can’t reach my face, or if you can’t… satisfy me… then…

COLIN

What?

ELENA (O.S.)

Hold on, I hadn’t really thought about it. I guess I could step on you and squash you to death.

COLIN

You wouldn’t!

ELENA (O.S.)

Or else I could sit on you. Would you like that? If I sat on you with my big butt? [laughs] I wish I could see that! Maybe I’ll set up my iPhone to record it, watching tiny little you disappear beneath my big, fat ass.

COLIN looks around desperately, but there is nothing nearby. Far off to the left is ELENA’s other breast, and far to the right is her bicep. These are too far to reach, and the breast he is on only has the nipple to cling to. COLIN carefully struggles to turn himself around so he is facing ELENA’s chest.

ELENA (O.S.)

Do you need a little help? It looks pretty difficult down there for you. Whatever you do, don’t look down.

COLIN

I didn’t intend to! You can’t punish me, I never wanted to do this in the first place!

ELENA (O.S.)

Come now, Colin, you know that’s not true. Okay, maybe you wanted to get trapped between my thighs, but a faceful of boob isn’t so bad, is it?

ELENA leans back: all we see is her upper breast reclining and her nipple sticking out as COLIN slowly shifts to nearly laying down upon her breast. He flattens himself against her skin and pulls himself up with his arms. His feet pinch her nipple and he pushes himself off from it, and slowly is able to reach ELENA’s collar bone and then her shoulder. From there he’s able to grab fistfuls of her hair and climb up to her jaw. Now we can see ELENA’s broad mouth. She is wearing dark red lipstick and smiling vastly.

ELENA

Look at you, you little monkey! Good job, I’m very proud of you! You need a little reward.

ELENA rocks her massive head, and COLIN goes swinging forward in her hair. He cries out in alarm, then wheels around to her face. His body slaps against her lips, and ELENA’s mouth puckers up to kiss him. Her lips cover his face. COLIN gasps for breath, pushing himself away, but ELENA shakes her head slightly and makes him fall back against her lips.

COLIN

Please, Elena… stop that… what are you doing…

ELENA

[exaggerated kissing noises]

COLIN

Are you drunk? Do I smell booze?

ELENA’s huge lips open and her massive tongue spills out. ELENA moans loudly as her tongue wraps around COLIN, pushing him back and forth and rubbing against his penis. COLIN begins to have a change of heart, wrapping ELENA’s hair around his fists and pulling himself up to expose his hips to her mouth. ELENA’s tongue slides over his sides and legs, then between his legs, and then her lips close and pucker around his hips. COLIN thrusts his pelvis into ELENA’s lips. ELENA moans through her nostrils, and COLIN begins to growl in coital tension. After some minutes of this COLIN achieves climax and ELENA’s vast red lips spread in a huge smile.

ELENA

Did you just cum in my lips, Colin? Is that what just happened?

COLIN

I’m sorry, Elena… I couldn’t help it… it really felt amazing…

ELENA

You liked it? Are you starting to get into this, Colin?

COLIN

I like it… goddamn it, I love it. I can’t believe how much I love this, Elena. How did you do this?

ELENA

Maybe I’ll tell you someday, or maybe we’ll never talk about it again. But you got your cookie, and now it’s my turn…

COLIN

What are you going to do?

ELENA’s fingers fly up from below and wrap around COLIN, exposing him from the waist up. A look of realization dawns on COLIN’s face as ELENA’s breasts rise up out of view. Her belly rises from below, and her navel sails past COLIN’s face then disappears overhead. ELENA’s thicket of pubic hair comes up, and ELENA’s fist lightly drags COLIN’s face and chest through it.

ELENA

I’m sorry I haven’t shaved, little man. I just choose not to. I don’t know what you prefer, and I guess right now it doesn’t matter.

COLIN

Elena… what are you about to do right now?

ELENA

Hold your breath, Colin. A deep breath.

ELENA’s pubic hair rises and her tremendous thighs come into view. ELENA’s fist descends between her thighs, and her engorged labia are now apparent. COLIN stares at them in awe and fright.

COLIN

Elena, don’t do this. You’re going to kill me, I’ll drown!

ELENA (O.S.)

You’d better do the best you can, then, little man. I promise you, as soon as you give me what I want, I’ll let you go.

COLIN

Wait, no! You said all I had to do was reach your face! I did that! Those were the rules!

ELENA (O.S.)

Things have come up, Colin. I’ve got needs, and you owe me, remember? This is where you can pay me back… or die trying. [laughs]

COLIN shrieks, cut short by ELENA’s fist inserting him into her vulva. Her fist slides up and down, and we can see COLIN’s feet sticking out of the bottom of her fist, as she grinds him into her labia. COLIN’s screams cut in and out as he emerges briefly, then is shoved back inside ELENA’s vagina.

ELENA (O.S.)

Even your screams feel good! Colin, fight harder, please!

This activity continues for several minutes.

ELENA (O.S.)

[breathing ragged] So close… it’s no good, it’s not enough… I need more. Colin! Get in there!

ELENA’s huge hand flattens against her labia. It is implied that COLIN is shoved inside her vagina. ELENA’s large fingers rub savagely into her labia and clitoris. She grunts off-stage. We hear nothing from COLIN and he has vanished from view.

ELENA’s fingers rub harder and faster, and ELENA begins emitting high, piercing yelps. Her massive thighs tense and shudder, and milky fluid flows through her fingers. ELENA shrieks and her fingers rapidly pat her labia and clitoris, and then her fingers pull away.

ELENA (O.S.)

Oh, my God… that was incredible… amazing… oh no, Colin!

ELENA’s fingers reappear and plunge between her milky, engorged labia. She sinks them in up to the base knuckles, swirling and searching, and then she withdraws them. Between her thumb and forefinger ELENA is pinching COLIN’s leg and carefully sliding him out of her. Her fingers and all of COLIN are thickly coated in ELENA’s juices. COLIN promptly coughs and splutters, gasping for air, wriggling only weakly from where he dangles in ELENA’s grip.

ELENA (O.S.)

Colin, say something! Are you okay? Oh my God, I didn’t want to hurt you!

COLIN moans. ELENA lifts him away: her thighs disappear down, her pubic hair descends beyond COLIN, as does her bellybutton. A long plane of soft flesh races by, then ELENA’s breasts descend into view and move on, and finally COLIN briefly dangles above ELENA’s deep red lips once more. Her lips part and COLIN is lowered into the inky blackness of her mouth. Very quickly she puckers her lips around his leg and she withdraws him like a popsicle stick. COLIN is cleaner now but slick with saliva and gasping for air.

ELENA

Are you okay? Colin? Please be okay!

COLIN

Elena… that was terrifying.

ELENA

I’m so sorry, Colin, that went much farther than I meant it to. I’m so sorry, I’ll never do that again.

COLIN

…Take that back.

ELENA

What?

COLIN

Don’t say that. It was terrifying but amazing. I want to do this again. Can you put me back down there?

ELENA

I’m not putting you inside me again! It’s too dangerous!

COLIN

No, just… lay me over your pussy, please. Let me have this, please.

ELENA

Okay. Okay, I can do that. Just… really be careful you don’t fall inside, okay?

ELENA lowers COLIN past the immense landscape of her body once more. She tenderly drapes his body over her labia. COLIN is recovering strength and wraps his fists in her pubic hair. By the thrusting of his hips we surmise that he is engaging in intercourse with her. His hips plunge into and disappear between ELENA’s huge labia, darkened and slick. ELENA’s hips slowly begin to rock and sway, and we hear her gasping off in the distance.

Slowly, COLIN begins to enlarge. He started out the same height as the length of ELENA’s vulva, but now his legs extend past her anus and his back grows wider. Soon he is able to stand on the floor, upon which ELENA is lying, and then he is taller than the massive thighs that surround him.

ELENA

Oh my God, Colin, what’s happening? Oh no! I think I cleaned you off too well!

COLIN continues to have sex with ELENA as he grows larger, to the size of a child, then eventually to his normal adult size. They are both nude and lying on the floor of her office. COLIN is atop her and he continues to have sex with ELENA, who begins to sob.

COLIN

What’s wrong? Are you okay? Am I hurting you?

ELENA

This went too far. I was supposed to keep you small for a little longer, just a little longer… but I screwed up.

COLIN

It’s okay, Elena, I’m not hurt. Do you not want me to do this?

ELENA

I want this so badly. Colin, you feel so good, but…

ELENA breaks into tears and COLIN ceases having sex with her, kneeling over her without making contact. ELENA gropes at his bottom but is unable to pull him down again.

ELENA

To hell with this job, to hell with this stupid job, I don’t care if I lose it… but goddamn it, I love my husband. I’m so sorry, Colin.

COLIN

There’s nothing to be sorry about, Elena, really. This whole thing is unrealistic. We can just walk away and tell ourselves it was a hallucination… a really vivid dream. Can you do that?

ELENA

It’s not that. I can keep a secret. And if I lost this job I wouldn’t care anyway, I can find another.

COLIN sits up and pulls ELENA to an upright sitting position.

COLIN

Then what’s the problem?

ELENA

I want to do this again. I want to shrink you down and feel you inside me again. And again! [sobbing]

COLIN

We can do that.

ELENA

What?

COLIN

We won’t tell anyone about this. This’ll be our private thing, okay? Keep your job, keep your husband. I really want to do this again, too.

ELENA

Colin…

COLIN and ELENA rise to their knees, naked. She embraces him, sobbing. He smiles and hugs her comfortingly.

ELENA

Is this wrong?

COLIN

This is very wrong. It’s so far wrong… it’s actually so incredibly wrong, I don’t know what it is. But maybe that’s why we can do it. It’s just too far beyond anything anyone can understand.

ELENA pauses then slowly nods. This isn’t the best answer she hoped for but it’s acceptable for now. They quietly laugh and make small talk while getting dressed again. At some point COLIN is kneeling behind her while she bends over to pull up her skirt, and he licks her buttock. ELENA yelps delightedly.

COLIN

Same time next week?

ELENA

Next week?

COLIN

Yeah, I’m expecting a surprise last-minute load of work. Could take me all evening.

FADE OUT

7 responses to “A Romance in Two Cheeks”

  1. Wonderful smut! Such irresistible slopes! I wish Elena would darken my office door one of these late nights…

    Back in the “good old days,” what Elena did to Colin was called “ravishing.” He might need some liquid courage himself for the next encounter.

    “This activity continues for several minutes.” Such a tease.

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    • I’m pleased you enjoyed this! I wondered if the format would be too jarring. This was an exercise for myself, as I felt I’d been digging a rut and wanted to play around with something new.

      The format did permit me to poke some fun at the story, like the “continues for several minutes” dodge. I was looking forward to that.

      And yes. Sign me up for a good, old-fashioned ravishing from a statuesque voluptuary. Or is it no longer being ravished if I’m exceedingly willing?

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      • Oh, the format was fine. I’ve seen scripts in every stage of development, and I know just how much can be gained or lost in translation to the final cut. We’ve all got our own rhythms for such sequences.

        Traditionally, victims in r-fantasies get to enjoy the pleasures of the act while displacing the guilt onto their assailants. Elena even indulged in the classic “you know you want it” gaslighting with that faceful-of-boob barb. The conflicting desires are why these stories are so compelling.

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  2. The script layout made it very easy to follow. Not that you are ever hard to follow, but quite a few things are happening here. I immediately feared for Colin, but slipped into an admiration for Elena. What she did required bravery, calling a man to her side, and telling him what’s about to happen, and then seeing it through. It’s lovely, and passionate. She wants him, she’s going to take him.

    I can’t say I’m entirely comfortable with everything she tries, but I’m only a distant witness here, and as long as they are enjoying each other, who am I to complain? I won’t, as long as he’s [relatively] safe, and happy. That’s all that matters to me. I would, however, punch her lights out, given the chance. She’s a little too rough with him for my taste. Yeah. I’d give her a bloody nose; teach her to be a little slower, a bit more careful.

    Now all we need is for this to be made into a movie of the week. Not Lifetime. They’d add a kidnapped baby or an abusive parent, and ruin everything.

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    • “The Baby and the Tiny Husband: A Double-Kidnapping” starring Meredith Baxter.

      Oh, don’t give Elena a bloody nose! She’s feeling her way around in the dark, many giantesses have to teach themselves and learn through experience. And while it gave her a thrill to feel dangerous, she felt truly dreadful when she thought she’d actually hurt Colin. Now, if she behaves like this twice, I’ll give you her home address and a roll of nickels.

      Like I told Olo, I tried the new format to wake my mind up a bit. I can crank out flash fiction until it doesn’t mean anything anymore. I can tweak small things like “today I’ll work on dramatic tension” and “today I’ll focus on themes”, but I was getting restless. And while this would probably make a shit production if another editor didn’t dress it up, it was refreshing to discipline myself to this format, even if it underscores that I have no ear for the flow in this format.

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  3. True. In the heat of passion, accidents can happen.

    I’d rather watch a “shit production” of this, than practically any show on TV. Of course, as executive producer I’d have the authority to have certain scenes elongated, and have all the unnecessary talking edited out. 🙂

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    • I wonder what the logistics would be to assemble a reasonable production studio. For what I want to do, I imagine the two hardest things would be finding acting talent and doing detailed motion-tracking editing. Lighting and sound would be difficult, and the current state of improv script is an ice bath for arousal, but those could be worked around.

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